The Parcel!! By Abigail

It was a mild, misty morning and Jennifer was in the kitchen eating her Cornflakes. They were soggy so she didn’t eat much. Not long after Jennifer had to go to school. She got to school just before the bell rang. Jennifer was bored all day long and was so glad when it finished. Jennifer did her homework straight away. Then her Mum called to say that there was  a parcel for her. Jennifer was thrilled. She hastily ran into the kitchen. Her Mum handed her the parcel. Jennifer ripped it open but strangely it was empty. What a surprise!

2 thoughts on “The Parcel!! By Abigail”

  1. Hi Abigail
    I like the way you build your story up, from Jennifer having breakfast to the box arriving. The contrast with the mundane events of the day and the excitement of the box being delivered was very clever.
    Miss T Team 100wc

  2. Abigail,
    Well done on your 100WC- I hope it is complete fiction and that you are not bored at school!!! I love your language- hastily/strangely/mild, misty, this makes your piece high standard.
    Keep up the great work,


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